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　　summerholiday,theweatherwasveryveryhot.Butsometimesitwasrainy.IwenttoHongKongwithmydad,mymom,mysisterandmybrotherBill.Weleftmygrandpaandmyhomeforthefirstdayofthesummerholidaythewewenttobysubway.WegottoHongKongsoon.Whenwegottothere.Wewereveryexcited.Thereweremanytallbuildingsanddifferentthingsthere.Theairwasfresh.Thestreetwasclean.Therewasnorubbishhere.Wewatchedveryhappy.Thenwevisitedmygrandparentsandwestayedintheirhomeforsevendays.

　　Onthefirstday,wevisiteddifferentplaces.Theywerebeautiful.Weplayedalot.Whenwehungrywewentarestaurantandategoodfood.Theywereveryyummy.OntheseconddaywewenttoOceanPark.Wewatchmanyfunnyshows.Andwetookmanypictures,too.Weweresoexcited.OnthethirddayIwenttoashopandboughtsomebeautifulpresentsformygrandpaandfriends.Onthefourthday.