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　　请专业人士看一下雅思大作文,做一下批改,并评价下大约多少分~3月5号就要考了,比较急~Somepeoplesayuniversitystudentsshouldpayfortheirtuitionfees.Someothersaythegovernmentshouldpayforthetuitionfees.To

　　请专业人士看一下雅思大作文,做一下批改,并评价下大约多少分~3月5号就要考了,比较急~

　　Somepeoplesayuniversitystudentsshouldpayfortheirtuitionfees.Someothersaythegovernmentshouldpayforthetuitionfees.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?

　　Inpresent-daysociety,itisgenerallyrecognizedthatuniversityeducationasignificantroleinourmodernlife.Butatthesametime,controversyhasarisenaboutwhetherthestudentorthegovernmentisresponsibleforthepaymentofthetuitionfees.

　　Itisobviousthattherearevariousofreasonsthatthestudentsshouldpayforthefeesbythemselves.Inthefirstplace,thestudentsarethedirectandfinalbeneficiariesofuniversityeducation.Specifically,theultimateobjectiveofuniversityeducationistoservethestudents.Inthesecondplace,thegovernmenthasalreadyshoulderthebasiceducationpayment.Forinstance,studentspaylittlewhentheyareinprimaryandsecondaryschools.atthattime,themajorityexpenditureofeducationarepaidbythegovernment.lastly,thegovernmentneedtoinvestinotherareas,suchasscientificresearch,healthcare,andallofthoseneedaamountofmoney.

　　Ontheotherhand,thereareseveralaspectsagainsttheargumentsabove.Tobeginwith,itseemsthatpeople,asataxpayer,havealreadyaccomplishedtheirresponsibilitiesanditistheirrighttoenjoytheeducationforfree.Furthermore,thegovernmentistheleaderofthewholecountry.Toprecise,itisresponsibleforthemtoimprovetheeducationleveloftheircitizens.Evenso,thegovernmentburdentoomuchpressure.Forinstance,fundingscientistresearchwhichaccountforabigpartoffinancialoutput.

　　Toconclude,Ibelievethatthegovernmentandthestudentsshouldsharetheresponsibilitiesoftuitionfees.specifically,thegovernmentpayasmallpartoffeesliketherentofaccommodationandstudentspaytheotherfeesbythemselves.

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卢炎麟

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　　条理很清楚,论证很明确,句式用词相对多样化,这些都是优点.很好.第二段写得比第三段好.

　　但是,还是有些用词不够精准,语法小错误,例如

　　1.toprecise-->tobeprecise

　　2.第三段的第二个分点虽然我能理解,但是表述不够地道,文化理解不到位：各个州或省在教育经费安排上有自己的权利;而且很多研究资金也用于解决教育funding的问题.

　　Furthermore,theoreticallythefederalgovernmentisinchargeofthenation-wideresourceallocation,butthespecificimplementationhappensatthestatelevel.Individualstategovernmenthastheirownrespectiveprioritiesandchallenges.Thedecisiononwhetherornotandhowmuchtofundtheeducationshouldbelefttostategovernment.Thelocalgovernmentsshouldmakeresponsibledecisionsbasedontheholisticinspectionoftheeducationobjectivesandplansofaction.

　　Additionally,thefederalgovernmentprovidestremendousamountoffundinginteachingandresearchannually.Thesefundsmayturnintofinancialaidsforthosewhoaremorequalified.Inreturn,thesereceiversgetfreecollegeeducation.Theselectiveinvestmentmaybringbackmorequalityreturns.

　　Takeeverythingintoconsideration,itismybeliefthatthegovernmentandthestudentsthemselvesshould.Thismaybeachievedbygovernmentofferingandassigningfundstoindividualstates,thestategovernment..