高中英语作文打分MYteacherMRMooreMrMooreismyteacherwhoisalovelyman.Heisthirty-fouryearsold.Buthelookslikeayoungmanbecauseheaiwaysdoingexercise.Soheisveryhealthy.Weallwanttohaveahealthybodylikehis,isn'ti

　　高中英语作文打分

　　MYteacherMRMoore

　　MrMooreismyteacherwhoisalovelyman.

　　Heisthirty-fouryearsold.Buthelookslikeayoungmanbecauseheaiwaysdoingexercise.Soheisveryhealthy.Weallwanttohaveahealthybodylikehis,isn'tit?MrMooreismyfriendratherthanmyteacher.Healwaysencouragingustotryourbesttostudy.Sowehaveagoodhobbyoflearning.Healsoleadesustoaworld

　　of"why".Ifwehavesomeproblemsonstudy,wewillaskforhelpveryactively.Howhappywearewhenwesolvingtheproblems!

　　Suchagreatman!Wealladmirehimmoreandmore.

　　满分是30，希望认真打分，哪些地方错了希望能指出来