请大家帮我看看我写的这个短文里面有哪些错误Today,Iwanttotellyouatruestory.Ithappened3yearsago.Atmidnight,IwassurfingontheInternet.Aftertime,Iwasalittletired.soIwenttobed.Ihadjustlaindown,Isawagrea

　　请大家帮我看看我写的这个短文里面有哪些错误

　　Today,Iwanttotellyouatruestory.Ithappened3yearsago.Atmidnight,IwassurfingontheInternet.Aftertime,Iwasalittletired.soIwenttobed.Ihadjustlaindown,Isawagreatmanyoflinesthatlookedlikeblackandwhiteonthetopwall.Itlookedlikeabadtelevision.Justthen,Ifound,Icouldn'tmoved.Itwasveryterrible.

　　Myheartwasveryfearasapoorchild.Butafteramoment,Icouldmoved.Iknew.Thiswas"ghostburden"thatpeopleoftendiscussion.

　　大意是：今天,我想跟你讲一个真实的故事,它发生在3年前,半夜的时候我正在上网,过了一会,我感觉有点累,我去了床上,我刚刚躺下,我看到了房顶有很多黑色和白色的线条,它看起来像一个坏掉的电视机,就在这时,我发现我不能动了,这太糟糕了,我感觉我就像一个可怜的小孩,但是过了一会,我发现我能动了,我知道了,这就是人们经常讨论的鬼压身.