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　　高手帮我批改一下作文（六级的）,并评一下分,Left-behindChildrenintheCountrysideWiththedevelopedofsociety,anumberoffarmershaveanopportunitytoworkinbigaswellasprosperouscitiestoearnmoremoneyfortheirpovert

　　高手帮我批改一下作文（六级的）,并评一下分,

　　Left-behindChildrenintheCountryside

　　Withthedevelopedofsociety,anumberoffarmershaveanopportunitytoworkinbigaswellasprosperouscitiestoearnmoremoneyfortheirpovertyfamilies.Asaresult,itincreasinglybecomesverypopularphenomenonthatleft-behindchildreninthecountryside.

　　Manydisadvantageaspectshavebeenfoundinthesechildrenwhoareleftintheirhomes.Tobeginwith,itiseducationproblem.Justasanoldsayingthatparentsarethefirstteacherintheirchildren.Goodhabitofwritinghomeworkanddiligentmannerswouldhavebeenkeptonchildrenwhoarestillyoungunlesstheirparentshavetakengoodcareof.What’smore,inviewofleft-behindchildren’sparentsworkoutofcountrysideforlongterm,thesechildrenwillfeellonelieralongwithlackofalotoflovefromtheirparentsthanchildrenwhoareinthesameages.Includingcausepsychologydiseasesaslongastheyareshortofcommunicationwiththeirparents.Besides,withoutparentswhoworkinbigurbancookdeliciousfood,left-behindchildrenwhoaregrowingbodieswouldfacetheproblemofdeficientnutrition.

　　Thiscouldbeaviableoptiontoassisttheissuethatgovernmentcouldhelpthecountrysidetodevelopfacilitiesandincreasewelfarestomeetthesuppliesoffarmers.Togetherwithourchildrenwillbeingoodcircumstancesonbothmindandbodyinsoonerorlater.

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　　WiththedevelopINGsociety,anumberoffarmershaveanopportunitytoworkinbigaswellasprosperouscitiestoearnmoremoneyfortheirpovertyfamilies.Asaresult,itincreasinglybecomesAverypopularphenomenonTHATchildrenWASLEFTinthecountryside.

　　ManydisadvantageShavebeenfoundinthesechildrenwhoareleftATtheirhomes.Tobeginwith,itiseducationproblem.JustasanoldsayingGOESthatparentsarethefirstteacherOFtheirchildren.Goodhabitofwritinghomeworkanddiligentmannerswouldhavebeenkeptonchildrenwhoarestillyoungunlesstheirparentshavetakengoodcareof.What’smore,inviewofleft-behindchildren’sparentsworkoutofcountrysideforlongterm,thesechildrenwillfeelMORELONELYalongwithLESSlovefromtheirparentsthanchildrenwhoareinthesameages.ITMAYcausepsychologydiseasesaslongasshortofcommunicationwiththeirparents.Besides,withoutparentscookINGdeliciousfood,left-behindchildrenwhoaregrowingbodieswouldfacetheproblemofdeficientnutrition.

　　Thiscouldbeaviableoptiontoassisttheissuethatgovernmentcouldhelpthecountrysidetodevelopfacilitiesandincreasewelfarestomeetthesuppliesoffarmers.Togetherwith(不能加句子吧)ourchildrenwillbeingoodcircumstancesonbothmindandbodyin(去掉)soonerorlater.改了一些,仅供参考.15分得话,我会给11分~~