IandmyfriendswenttoapicnicintheparkOneday,thefathersaidtotakemetoapicnicinthepark,I'mveryexcited,immediatelyreadytoequipmentandfood,readytogo.I'llbuythewater,fathero...

　　可以在简短一点吗？太长了。。。你改一下我会给你加分的！O(∩_∩)O谢谢

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