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  帮我改下我的作文好吗语法等方面MyholidayMyholidaywasnotverygood.BeforemyholidayIwasgoingtostudyveryhardinholiday.ButI’mfailed.Firstoneweek,Ireadalotofbook,butnotthebookIstudynow.IwantedtoreadmanyE

  帮我改下我的作文好吗语法等方面

  Myholiday

  Myholidaywasnotverygood.BeforemyholidayIwasgoingtostudyveryhardinholiday.ButI’mfailed.Firstoneweek,Ireadalotofbook,butnotthebookIstudynow.IwantedtoreadmanyEnglishbooks,butfailed,too.Aftermyhardworkingoneweek,Ibecameverylazy,Icouldn’twakeupearly.Imustfinishmyhomework,butIdon’tknowwheretostart.SoIbecameafailure.ButIdidn’twantmetobecomeasheerlazyborn,soIpromisedthatIwillmakemyselfthin.Iatealittleeveryday.IhatemakeexercisesoIdidn’tdoit,butI’msucceed.Ireallybecamethinnerthanbefore.It’smyhappiestthinginmyholiday.Ihaveasister,inmyholidaysheplayedwithmeinMingCheng.WebothwantedtowatchTVverymuch.Butit’sbecameahardproblem.MygrandfatherwaswatchingTVeveryday,andalltheprogramshewatchedismymosthateprogram.Mygrandfatherisacuriousoldman.Idon’tknowwhathethinks.Whenwenotwantsleepheslept,whenwewantsleeporslepthedomanythingletmecrazy.IthinkI’malreadybecameacrazygirl.Mysleeptimeisalittle,Ilikeinschoolthanhome.IntheschoolIcansleepmorethanathomeatleast.Myskinbecamebad,soI’mverysad.I’magirl,IlikebeautyandIneedagoodskin.ButallthethingIneedwasbecameadream.Butmygrandmotherisverygood,sheknownitandgavemesomemoneyletmebuywhatIlike.Iwassoexcited.IwenttoPanShiwithmysisterandweboughtalotofthingwhatIlike.ThenIwenttoJilinprovincetostaywithmybestfriend.Sheisabeautifulgirl,wealllikecoffeeverymuch.SheboughtmealotofcoffeewhenIbacktoschool.It’smyholiday,notgood,notbad

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2020-12-1501:26
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  我想楼主的英语能力还是初中水平吧,至少比我好多了.里面看不出有什么高级词汇.都是简单的主谓宾结构.希望楼主多灵活运用些高级词汇,这样对你的写作能力和得分会有很大的提高,句式不要太单调,这样评卷老师会对你有很高的印象的,虽然我看不出你的作品有什么错误的地方,大体的意思我还是可以了解的,希望继续努力,中国未来的外交官助手.

2020-12-15 01:30:41
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