【托福作文一篇，大神给批一下吧，打个分，30分制。谢谢！！题目：Doyouagreeordisagreethestatement:peoplewhocannotacceptthecriticismfromotherswillnotbesuccessfulatworking.“Ifyoudon’thearthesuggesti】

　　托福作文一篇，大神给批一下吧，打个分，30分制。谢谢！！题目：Doyouagreeordisagreethestatement:peoplewhocannotacceptthecriticismfromotherswillnotbesuccessfulatworking.“Ifyoudon’thearthesuggestionfromtheexperiencedpeople,youwillbeclosertofail.”Thisisanoldsayingthateverybodyknows.Thatmeansifyoudon’tthinkcarefullyaboutotherpeople’sidea,suggestionorcriticism,youwillmeetsometroubleormisssomequickwaytosuccess.SinceIwasveryyoung,mymotherhadtaughtmethissentence(IbelievemostofChineseparentswilltelltheirchildthisquote).Afterthat,Ialwayskeephumblepersonality,andithelpsmealotinmylife.SoItotallyagreewiththestatement.Firstofall,thepeoplewhocanreceivecriticismareintelligent,becausetheyknowwhatisimportanttothem.“Wrongtochange,Righttoremind.”Thisquotemeansonceyoureceiveacriticism,ifyoureallydidthewrongthings,justchangeorcorrectit;ifyoudonotdidthewrongthings,youneedtotreatthecriticismasaremindforyou.Generally,criticismisusefulandhelpfulforus.Moreover,intheworkinggroup,weneedtolearnhowtokeepthehealthyrelationshipbetweenourteammates.Therejectionofcriticismwillleadmorenegativeattitudeforeverybodyinthegroup.Theworsethingisgroupbroken.Soreceivingandconsideringthecriticismimmediatelyisveryimportanttomaintaingroup’satmosphere,andusefultoincreasethegroupefficiency.Notonlythese,thoughtthecriticismcanmakeyouknowmoreaboutyourfriends,anotherquotecanexplainthis.“Thepersonwhocangiveyouthekeysuggestions,criticisms,andwarningsisworthtobeafriend.”Ifyourfrienddarestosayyourfaultdirectly,thereisnodoubtthattheguycanbeyourbestfriend.InChina,wecallthiskindofperson“ZhengYou”,whichmeansafriendwhowillingtogiveforthrightadmonition.Inthetraditionalculture,thesefriendsarethekeytosuccess.Tosumup,thepeoplewhocanspeakoutthecriticismforyoualwaysdonothavespite.Theyjustwanttohelpyoufinishtheworkperfectly.Peoplewhocannotacceptthecriticismwilllosemanyopportunitiestoimproving.好久不练了，30分钟才出了350字。。。