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  【谁能帮我判判作文?我下个月8号就要考雅思了.剑桥四第一篇作文我写的:Accordingtothetable,thereweredifferentcategoriesoffamilieslivinginpovertyinAustualiain1999.Tosunup,therewere11%oftheallhusbandlivin】

  谁能帮我判判作文?我下个月8号就要考雅思了.

  剑桥四第一篇作文

  我写的:Accordingtothetable,thereweredifferentcategoriesoffamilieslivinginpovertyinAustualiain1999.

  Tosunup,therewere11%oftheallhusbandlivinginthepositiondeeply.Itisabout1837000.Itisnoticeablethatthoseconsistingofonlyareparentorasingleadultweremorelakelytofallintrouble,with21%and19%.Acommonfamilyandafamilywithnochildwasaccountforonly13%and7%,whichshandsinmarkedcontrasttothen.

  Itischearfromthecharttherelationshipbetweensigleandcoupleappearproportion.Singleadultswere2timesthancoupleswithoutchildren(7%).

  However,itdidn'taffectelderpeopletoomuch.Whentheywerenotyoung,theywerenottobepoor.Singlewith6%,andcouplewith4%.

  Inconclusion,childrentrendfamilyalotinthetableuntiltheywereold.

  图表作文,不同的人生活在贫困的比率。

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2020-09-1823:26
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  最基本的,词数不满150.

  有单词拼写错误,这是不能犯得错误吖.例如第二段开头应该是“tosumup”.

  tosumup应该用在最后.

  时态应用现在时.

  theywerenottobepoor是病句,应把tobe去掉.

  其它的.尽量找突出的数据例如最值点来陈述.还有,多用长难句.

  因为不知道题目,所以不能评价太多.这文章...应该只有4.5.

2020-09-18 23:28:47
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