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　　帮忙修改一篇IELTS大作文顺便帮帮改改分--Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungtogotoschoolforchildrenbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotos

　　帮忙修改一篇IELTS大作文顺便帮帮改改分--

　　Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungtogotoschoolforchildrenbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible

　　Itismyconsideredviewthatchildrenshouldallowedtostayathomeandplaywithfriendsuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold

　　Theprimaryreasonisstudy.Foryoungchildren,themostimmediatefactorisunderstandingability.Weknowthedon’thaveahighleaveunderstandingabilitywhenwearealittlebaby.

　　Moreover,youngchildrenneedmoreandmoreplayingwithfriendsforcultivatecreativeability,individuality,socialabilityandect.Thereasonwhyweshouldmakechildrenstayhomebeforesixorseventearsold.

　　Nevertheless,thatwemakechildrengotoschoolasearlyascanteachmoreandmorescholarship.Butthekidscan’treallyrealizewhatischildhood.

　　Tosummarise,thattheyoungchildrenstayhomeuntilsixorsevenyearsoldiswelladvisedinmypersonalidea.

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　　Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungforchildrentogotoschoolbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible

　　Itismyconsideredviewthatchildrenshouldbeallowedtostayathomeandplaywithfriendsuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold

　　Theprimaryreasonisstudy.Foryoungchildren,themostimmediatefactoristrainingtheirunderstandingabilityies.Asweknow,theydidn’thaveahighleaveunderstandingabilitywhentheywerealittlebaby.

　　Moreover,youngchildrenneedmoreandmoreplayingwithfriendstocultivatetheircreativeabilities,individualities,socialabilityiesandsoon.It`sthereasonwhyweshouldmakechildrenstayhomebeforesixorseventearsold.

　　Nevertheless,Ifwemakechildrengotoschoolasearlyaswecan,ourchildrencangetmoreknowledge,butthekidscan’treallyenjoytheirchildhood.

　　Inaword,IthinkIt`swelladvisedthattheyoungchildrenstayhomebeforesixorsevenyearsold