请哪位英语比较好的来看看这篇短诗有没有语病I'msailingthroughtheseaToanislandwherewe'llmeetYou'llhearthemusicfilltheairI'llputaflowerinyourhairThoughthebreezesthroughtreesMovesoprettyyou'reallIsee
请哪位英语比较好的来看看这篇短诗有没有语病
I'msailingthroughthesea
Toanislandwherewe'llmeet
You'llhearthemusicfilltheair
I'llputaflowerinyourhair
Thoughthebreezesthroughtrees
Movesoprettyyou'reallIsee
Astheworldkeepsspinninground
Youholdmerighthererightnow
这是在某贴吧里看到的,用翻译软件翻了下(大家也知道哈,不可靠嘛)
觉得挺好的,想誊到笔记本上,看下有么有语病或拼写错误,最好再翻译一下!
如果回答完全符合本人要求的话,