Itisaresponseessay,andIwouldappreciateifyoucanprovidemeconstructivefeedbackontheargument,sentencestructures,grammar,organization,criticalreasoningandtransitions.

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　　Inthistimeandage,scienceandtechnologyareadvancingatanalarmingrate.Itgoeswithoutsayingthattherapiddevelopmentofscienceandtechnologybringsconsiderablebenefitstohumanbeing.Thankstoscience,wenowlivesafer,morecomfortableandconvenientlife.However,othersarguethatitalsobringsusenvironmentalpollutionandenergyshortage.Itotallyagreewithit.

　　Firstly,scienceshouldberesponsibleforenvironmentalissues.Whenweenjoythecomfortandconvenienceofmoderntraffic,alargeamountofexhaustgasfromautomobilesleadstoseriousairpollution.Inaddition,owingtothedevelopmentofmodernagriculturaltechnology,farmerstendtouselotsofchemicalfertilizersandpesticidestoincreasetheyield.Nevertheless,weoftenneglecttheadverseeffectofthesechemicals,whichseverelypoisonourarablesoilandundergroundwater.

　　Besidesenvironmentalpollution,sciencealsoprobablycausesenergyshortage.Withadvancesintechnology,weareabletousethemoderntechnologytoexploitmoreenergy(includingfossilfuel,coal,naturalgasandsoon)tomeetthedemandforthegrowingpopulation.Themorepopulationwehave,themoreenergyweneed.Finallyitresultsinaviciouscirclewiththeenergyconsumptionandthepopulationgrowth.Furthermore,withtheexpansionofindustrialization,requirementforenergyworldwidehasanupwardtrend.Wehaveagreatneedforenergybecauseoftherapidgrowthofoureconomy.

　　Admittedly,somepeopleholdthatwecanreduceenvironmentalpollutionbygreentechnology,andexplorerenewableandcleanenergysuchaswindenergyorsolarenergytosolveenergycrisis.Butthesenewtechnologiesneedalargenumberofinvestmentsonresearchanddevelopment.Mostcountriescannotaffordit.Thereforethesemethodsareinfeasibleintheshortterm.

　　Byawayofconclusion,Ibelievethatitisthedevelopmentofscienceandtechnologythatleadstothepollutionofenvironmentandshortageofenergy.

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